Excellent, as always, but honestly I couldn't stop thinking about this line in your introduction: "he intervenes to improve her circumstances, lest she disagree with her current ones and end up killing them all." That, dear lady, was pure genius :)
Now we are quickly 6 months out from the breakout... all search efforts by Luke and Logan have failed, and Logan has descended to rock bottom in a haze of guilt fueled by alcohol. Clearly the PG would be aware of the frantic search, but choosing to keep 'Misty' totally under wraps from Luke and company. Has he really been completely successful?
It was a hard painful switch back to Logan's point of view and his drop into guilt and self isolation! Another hint of the shift in tone for the story into a darker gritter world I think. And we also have to wonder how successful Cathy has been at becoming Misty's best friend. Does the good cop bad cop routine actually work on our warrior?
There was one seeming throw away contact that claimed to have seen a possible candidate for Misty being spotted which came to Logan from his search! And he sent an updated response back to the contact apparently. But nothing else came of it as far as we know. Seems like something is left dangling there... just wondering as I sometimes do! So Jenny, did you ever fly fish?
Well done Frank! That's a pretty good summary, and some intriguing speculation there. Yes, things are taking a darker turn here. As for the PG keeping our girl under wraps, well you'll see soon how that's going.
I agree something is dangling here. I've been struggling to get this scene to flow and I couldn't pinpoint why, but I have a feeling you're on to something. It's a too fast transition from one month out to six months out, from despair to depression to absolute disaster. I might do a flashback thing at some point to fill it in. Or rewrite the thing entirely. I wasn't happy with this one. I knew what I wanted to do, and that was move the story along, maybe I was a bit hasty. I keep trying to remind myself that done is better than perfect, and I'm all caught up with myself here and writing in my spare moments. I'm thinking I should skip one and focus on quality. The next one will be better, promise.
Jenny, I've wanted to reply back but struggling to do so... Just to say I'm not lobbying for any particular approach to telling this epic adventure ! I'm up for however the tale unfolds at whatever pace it takes! Hopefully this 'clarification' is not a further distraction, lol! Cheers
No, no! I appreciate the feedback. It's invaluable. I am flattered that you'd call this an 'epic' adventure, I wouldn't exactly say the scale is even remotely epic, but I will try to keep up the pace. I think I'm almost back on track and up to speed, I just can't promise that it'll stay that way. Life and all... Tomorrow, my dear Frank, tomorrow you get another dose. I look forward to your thoughts.
Excellent, as always, but honestly I couldn't stop thinking about this line in your introduction: "he intervenes to improve her circumstances, lest she disagree with her current ones and end up killing them all." That, dear lady, was pure genius :)
As always, thanks Dave. 😊
Now we are quickly 6 months out from the breakout... all search efforts by Luke and Logan have failed, and Logan has descended to rock bottom in a haze of guilt fueled by alcohol. Clearly the PG would be aware of the frantic search, but choosing to keep 'Misty' totally under wraps from Luke and company. Has he really been completely successful?
It was a hard painful switch back to Logan's point of view and his drop into guilt and self isolation! Another hint of the shift in tone for the story into a darker gritter world I think. And we also have to wonder how successful Cathy has been at becoming Misty's best friend. Does the good cop bad cop routine actually work on our warrior?
There was one seeming throw away contact that claimed to have seen a possible candidate for Misty being spotted which came to Logan from his search! And he sent an updated response back to the contact apparently. But nothing else came of it as far as we know. Seems like something is left dangling there... just wondering as I sometimes do! So Jenny, did you ever fly fish?
Well done Frank! That's a pretty good summary, and some intriguing speculation there. Yes, things are taking a darker turn here. As for the PG keeping our girl under wraps, well you'll see soon how that's going.
I agree something is dangling here. I've been struggling to get this scene to flow and I couldn't pinpoint why, but I have a feeling you're on to something. It's a too fast transition from one month out to six months out, from despair to depression to absolute disaster. I might do a flashback thing at some point to fill it in. Or rewrite the thing entirely. I wasn't happy with this one. I knew what I wanted to do, and that was move the story along, maybe I was a bit hasty. I keep trying to remind myself that done is better than perfect, and I'm all caught up with myself here and writing in my spare moments. I'm thinking I should skip one and focus on quality. The next one will be better, promise.
Jenny, I've wanted to reply back but struggling to do so... Just to say I'm not lobbying for any particular approach to telling this epic adventure ! I'm up for however the tale unfolds at whatever pace it takes! Hopefully this 'clarification' is not a further distraction, lol! Cheers
No, no! I appreciate the feedback. It's invaluable. I am flattered that you'd call this an 'epic' adventure, I wouldn't exactly say the scale is even remotely epic, but I will try to keep up the pace. I think I'm almost back on track and up to speed, I just can't promise that it'll stay that way. Life and all... Tomorrow, my dear Frank, tomorrow you get another dose. I look forward to your thoughts.