Well Jenny, really delayed this time...and a whole song an dance of explanation was forthcoming, along with infinite parsing of this episode...neither being necessary!
Suffice to say this episode leading off Chapter 2 contains a whole lot of important stuff, information about the Gifted Children and Misty in particular! I know I missed or forgot a lot of nuance that would have made my comprehension much quicker on the first go around. Energy management is a big one along with the key differences between Misty and the other children. How her birth affected both herself and her mother and has a huge long term effect! A big question mark is why is the Telaran population being so closely monitored to spot and segregate these kids very early? Are they being groomed as a super army for defensive or offensive purposes? Or? And still the question remains about how reliable is Misty's dream state about these snippets of memory? There is a lot of trauma being alluded to (physical and mental), and terrible if true!
Now there are interesting interactions going on between Misty and Lukes family...some sort of fascination about Logan from Misty, maybe its just his physical appearance and strength or does it spring from not understanding his restraint in dealing with her aggregation? And she has definitely classified Luke as something special 'a blue eyed Pure One'? Is it that he is a genetically pure human from Earth, an Elder Race maybe?
Oh, and at this point Logan seems to have decided on his own to call Misty "Elle" just because he heard her mumble "Christelle" when she was in a previous unconscious state, talk about impulsive! Of course we (I) now know that she calls herself Misty from an early bit of internal dialog, which I missed repeatedly and caused me no end of confusion the first time around!
Hello there dear Frank. I must admit I was quite disappointed by this delay, but no matter. We have lives, I don't mind being low on your priority list--not one bit. Nice to be on the list at all really. I appreciate you making a point of responding here, every time. Thanks so much Frank.
You're right of course to notice all the details. This episode is a bit of an infodump though hopefully nicely wrapped up in a story bow. I needed to make a few things clear before everything gets started. I could answer all your questions, of course. Some very astute queries there. Though I must be honest I'm not sure that all of them are even answered in the first part which you've seen the entirety of. One in particular being exactly why the Teleran Royal family is watching, though it is implied somewhere, I'm sure.
The terrible trauma though, well you've seen the end. You know better than anyone here...
But Luke is indeed someone special. I don't think I ever tell his full story, and it's sad, I suppose I should. I have a few ideas...
As for the name Elle, maybe you missed when Luke says it. Just after they land, before the hallway fight. They're calling her "Elle, a No'Gard cousin they found in the nebula."
But I'm glad you found where she talks to herself, and calls herself Misty. That was important. She talks to herself at other times too, you'll notice.
I do that. A lot. My dad always said its the first sign of madness. I suppose it takes a certain degree of madness to make up a story like this one. As always, friend, I look forward to your thoughts. Till next time.
Well, if it wasn't for extenuating circumstances Jenny, I would feel a total smuck!
Mea culpa my friend!
Now first, a point I intended to add and didn't in my haste...with this second pass thru I find it quite amazing how much long term development and foresight you have already laid down in one lead in chapter, which will bear fruit sometimes far down the the storyline. You have really planted some great seeds! "Penitent" for example...
Now I will be a double smuck, with a game of gotcha...I'm evil when challenged...but in the text as it stands, Luke never says what you quoted. Perhaps in an earlier draft. What he does say is "Tom and I have agreed that we will refer to her as your cousin. Found in dire straights, the sole survivor of a hyper-drive malfunction caused by your nebula. We identified her by the family crest emblazoned on their shuttle and brought her back.” Logan does hear her mumbling Chrys's name while he is penalty after messing everything up and a little later says to himself, I believe right before she wakes, "I must call her Elle". Seemingly having related to the later part of Chrys's name as belonging to Misty! I mean, surely you can remember with absolute accuracy every word of this story!! Lol, and I stand ready to be flayed at your pleasure!!
Oh my, okay, call me schooled. Fine. Well done. I was paraphrasing, though, not quoting, I suppose I should have framed it as such. Yes, I should be able to remember every word. I do not, well I do, but its hard to hold a hundred thousand of those in your head all at once. which is why I wrote it out. But I appreciate the feedback. It shows me the holes more clearly than anything I can try on my own. So, thanks, I'll take it under advisement.
But I wonder if the drop of that name here isn't nearly perfect as it stands though. It sort of reminds you that there are things happening off screen, missed conversations. Maybe Luke and Logan chatted about it at some point. maybe Luke was there to check in and heard her mumbling. It makes you wonder how they came up with it, and your logic there is spot on, but not everyone will make that leap, or maybe they will, it's not obscure at all.
As for my long term development, well the story was fully formed when I started posting it here. And Misty's Penance is a core element. Just as James is the monster under the bed right from the start.
And a good first chapter should lay the groundwork for the entire book shouldn't it? I'm sure there are a whole bunch of seeds you're still missing. I'd be interested to see how many you pick up as the story progresses.
Oh Jenny, please don't become a politician on me..."I was paraphrasing", indeed? 😂
Anyway, thank you for this discussion which continues to add to my enjoyment! And I am totally in agreement with you... don't change anything here. A little ambiguity is useful!
I'm absolutely sure that I will not catch all the seeds / breadcrumbs that you laid down but the mental workout I can clearly use! Carry on!!!
Well Jenny, really delayed this time...and a whole song an dance of explanation was forthcoming, along with infinite parsing of this episode...neither being necessary!
Suffice to say this episode leading off Chapter 2 contains a whole lot of important stuff, information about the Gifted Children and Misty in particular! I know I missed or forgot a lot of nuance that would have made my comprehension much quicker on the first go around. Energy management is a big one along with the key differences between Misty and the other children. How her birth affected both herself and her mother and has a huge long term effect! A big question mark is why is the Telaran population being so closely monitored to spot and segregate these kids very early? Are they being groomed as a super army for defensive or offensive purposes? Or? And still the question remains about how reliable is Misty's dream state about these snippets of memory? There is a lot of trauma being alluded to (physical and mental), and terrible if true!
Now there are interesting interactions going on between Misty and Lukes family...some sort of fascination about Logan from Misty, maybe its just his physical appearance and strength or does it spring from not understanding his restraint in dealing with her aggregation? And she has definitely classified Luke as something special 'a blue eyed Pure One'? Is it that he is a genetically pure human from Earth, an Elder Race maybe?
Oh, and at this point Logan seems to have decided on his own to call Misty "Elle" just because he heard her mumble "Christelle" when she was in a previous unconscious state, talk about impulsive! Of course we (I) now know that she calls herself Misty from an early bit of internal dialog, which I missed repeatedly and caused me no end of confusion the first time around!
Ok, that's enough I think, Jenny!
Hello there dear Frank. I must admit I was quite disappointed by this delay, but no matter. We have lives, I don't mind being low on your priority list--not one bit. Nice to be on the list at all really. I appreciate you making a point of responding here, every time. Thanks so much Frank.
You're right of course to notice all the details. This episode is a bit of an infodump though hopefully nicely wrapped up in a story bow. I needed to make a few things clear before everything gets started. I could answer all your questions, of course. Some very astute queries there. Though I must be honest I'm not sure that all of them are even answered in the first part which you've seen the entirety of. One in particular being exactly why the Teleran Royal family is watching, though it is implied somewhere, I'm sure.
The terrible trauma though, well you've seen the end. You know better than anyone here...
But Luke is indeed someone special. I don't think I ever tell his full story, and it's sad, I suppose I should. I have a few ideas...
As for the name Elle, maybe you missed when Luke says it. Just after they land, before the hallway fight. They're calling her "Elle, a No'Gard cousin they found in the nebula."
But I'm glad you found where she talks to herself, and calls herself Misty. That was important. She talks to herself at other times too, you'll notice.
I do that. A lot. My dad always said its the first sign of madness. I suppose it takes a certain degree of madness to make up a story like this one. As always, friend, I look forward to your thoughts. Till next time.
Well, if it wasn't for extenuating circumstances Jenny, I would feel a total smuck!
Mea culpa my friend!
Now first, a point I intended to add and didn't in my haste...with this second pass thru I find it quite amazing how much long term development and foresight you have already laid down in one lead in chapter, which will bear fruit sometimes far down the the storyline. You have really planted some great seeds! "Penitent" for example...
Now I will be a double smuck, with a game of gotcha...I'm evil when challenged...but in the text as it stands, Luke never says what you quoted. Perhaps in an earlier draft. What he does say is "Tom and I have agreed that we will refer to her as your cousin. Found in dire straights, the sole survivor of a hyper-drive malfunction caused by your nebula. We identified her by the family crest emblazoned on their shuttle and brought her back.” Logan does hear her mumbling Chrys's name while he is penalty after messing everything up and a little later says to himself, I believe right before she wakes, "I must call her Elle". Seemingly having related to the later part of Chrys's name as belonging to Misty! I mean, surely you can remember with absolute accuracy every word of this story!! Lol, and I stand ready to be flayed at your pleasure!!
Oh my, okay, call me schooled. Fine. Well done. I was paraphrasing, though, not quoting, I suppose I should have framed it as such. Yes, I should be able to remember every word. I do not, well I do, but its hard to hold a hundred thousand of those in your head all at once. which is why I wrote it out. But I appreciate the feedback. It shows me the holes more clearly than anything I can try on my own. So, thanks, I'll take it under advisement.
But I wonder if the drop of that name here isn't nearly perfect as it stands though. It sort of reminds you that there are things happening off screen, missed conversations. Maybe Luke and Logan chatted about it at some point. maybe Luke was there to check in and heard her mumbling. It makes you wonder how they came up with it, and your logic there is spot on, but not everyone will make that leap, or maybe they will, it's not obscure at all.
As for my long term development, well the story was fully formed when I started posting it here. And Misty's Penance is a core element. Just as James is the monster under the bed right from the start.
And a good first chapter should lay the groundwork for the entire book shouldn't it? I'm sure there are a whole bunch of seeds you're still missing. I'd be interested to see how many you pick up as the story progresses.
Oh Jenny, please don't become a politician on me..."I was paraphrasing", indeed? 😂
Anyway, thank you for this discussion which continues to add to my enjoyment! And I am totally in agreement with you... don't change anything here. A little ambiguity is useful!
I'm absolutely sure that I will not catch all the seeds / breadcrumbs that you laid down but the mental workout I can clearly use! Carry on!!!
🤫😉😂